Some detailed writing here Sonia - well done! Be careful not to talk through each and every scene in sequential order. You should be identifying and discussing your key observation/strongest points, it is the quality of your writing over the quantity of your observations that I would like to see.
Target: To write formally. Try to avoid colloquial, informal writing such as -'it keeps him on his toes'. How could oyu rephrase this to make it stronger?
Some detailed writing here Sonia - well done! Be careful not to talk through each and every scene in sequential order. You should be identifying and discussing your key observation/strongest points, it is the quality of your writing over the quantity of your observations that I would like to see.
ReplyDeleteTarget: To write formally. Try to avoid colloquial, informal writing such as -'it keeps him on his toes'. How could oyu rephrase this to make it stronger?